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Veni Vidi Vici by Fetus-Man Veni Vidi Vici by Fetus-Man
Commission for :iconseztren: of his character Veni!

Crowquill + Ink & Digital Colors
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Sol-Caninus Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014   Traditional Artist
This is a complicated piece, which has good points and bad.  The good is that the top part makes for an interesting design.

The problem I mark is in the lower part where the figures get stuck together because of blending of values and tangents.  

The blending of values probably wasn't an issue in the black and white.  

The tangent is where her skirt hem and high heel completes the back of his raised leg and hip.  

I think running her leg parallel to his here is a mistake.  Having one oppose the other or at least angle away would be better.  Sure, as it is there is a lot of dynamism.  The thing is that those dynamics could be more coherent -- meaning, given the gestures and balance of the figures, it is not exactly clear what all the actions are and how they relate to each other (i.e. is she tripping him, bumping him, kicking him?)

For what it's worth. :thumbsup:
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Fetus-Man Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
Thanks man!  You're completely right about those wild tangents in the overlapping leg areas, they were bugging me the whole time I was working on this. Those creases just blend the whole image into a big lump.  I did the best I could with it all things considered I guess, looked great as a thumbnail but it didn't translate too well after that. I would have ideally scrapped the whole thing and redone it but the person who commissioned it has been waiting more than a few months for this and I just had to get it out there.  Chances are I'll revisit it and deliver something better when I get freed up.

I know I can count on you to reinforce these things I note as I'm drawing, I always appreciate the thought out critiques, I really need to reciprocate!

Thanks again amigo!
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Sol-Caninus Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014   Traditional Artist
Anytime!
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Seztren Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
And you'd be very welcome to revisit it, of course. Though I'm very happy with how it came out.
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Fetus-Man Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
Most definitely, she's a lot of fun to draw and I'd be eager for a second go at her before too long.  Glad you dig it though, I'm still happy with it too, it could just use a little extra push!
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galvo Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Professional Artist
stellar. the simplicity of the blood and facial cavity. *smooch* molto bella
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Fetus-Man Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
Thanks Gabo! Rendering the cored out head felt so 'right', I think its the most solid part of the drawing.
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galvo Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Professional Artist
it makes me grin hardcore. and i dont know why. specially that eyeball haha
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Seztren Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
That title is very appropriate. ;>
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Fetus-Man Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
Haha, I thought so too!
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